Value Essay
By : Haley Asselin---
Not many People know What’s important in life. People wonder if it’s the high priced items found everywhere, or a high tech system of electronics. Maybe it’s those everyday moments that no one really realizes that those are important in life. You could have a great time without spending any money and making some unforgettable memories that no high priced item could even come close to those moments that you could never forget.
My priceless item is basketball.I remember the first time i picked up a basketball, it was a instant love. I was 5 years old and my mom signed me up for St.Pats CYO basketball , i was really excited to play just like every other 5 year old was. Every since i picked up a basketball, my mom had never saw me smile as much as i did when i was playing basketball. Everyone knew that this would be something special.
It was January and it was the day, the day of my first real basketball game were they actually kept score and had real refs that weren't just coaches. I was so nervous i was ready to pee my pants, but i knew that i’ve been waiting for this day to come and i was truly really excited to play.
It was time to play. My coach told me to do the jump ball, I was so scared that i would mess up but i knew i had to do it. I went up to the half court mark and stood at the girl that was jumping for the ball too. My nerves were even worse, this girl was 2 feet taller than me, i swear she was in high school she was unhumanly tall. Now i had to guard this girl. This is crazy!
The ref made sure no-one had any jewelry on then he blew his whistle and threw the ball up right in the middle of this 7 Feet girl and i, i jumped as high as i could to try and tap it to my teammate. I did it! I really did it, i got it to my teammate! I beat this girl! Everyone was cheering so loud! Lexi then dribbled it down the court and made a layup. The crowd then went wild again. This was the best day ever! We were already winning!
My coach had me play Center and of course i was guarding the tall girl, the ball got passed to her and i had my hands straight up so i could try and block her shot, as she went up to shoot i put my hand right in front of the ball, and as she shot i hit it right out of her hands. The crowd went crazy. They couldn't believe i just blocked a girl twice my sizes shot, i couldn't really believe it either!
My Priced Item is my Iphone 5. About a month ago I was playing volleyball outside with my friends, and i had my phone in my pocket while i was playing. I went to go and set the ball and my phone fell out of my pocket i was worried it wasn’t going to work anymore and i was right! It wouldn't even turn on! My parents had been telling me that i could get a new phone because my phone just wasn’t working right and it was so slow and annoyed me so much.
I told my mom that i broke my phone, and i needed a new one! She said awhile ago that i was going to get one for Christmas, but Christmas was a month away and i didn't want to wait that long and i wouldn't have a phone for a month and that would be torture for me. My mom agreed to get me a new phone that day, but that would be part of my Christmas present. I was totally fine with it.
I was so excited to finally get the iPhone 5! Everyone was talking about how amazing it was and it was crazy how much stuff you could do with it. After i got it i don’t think i took my eyes off of it for the rest of the night. I fell in love with this phone. It was so amazing!
Playing Basketball and my iPhone 5 are both valuable to me. They are similar because the both affect my mood and how it will be for the rest of the day. When i play basketball nothing matters but basketball, i forget about everything and focus on basketball. My phone helps me to get away from things and listen to music or play a game. Basketball & My Iphone can make me a happier person and be able to get away from the world and do what makes me happy.
Although they are similar they are also different. Basketball is something i can physically do with my whole body and it relieves stress. For me running helps me relieve stress and not have a care in the world. My iPhone is something i do with just my fingers and is usually a way i can talk to friends or just listen to music to relax me.
As you can see i value these things very much. Sometimes it’s not all about the priced things , it could be just the daily activities that could to just as much as something that costs money. In my opinion i could pick playing basketball instead of my iphone, Basketball has made me the person i am today and my iphone could never do that.
I. what the author is telling me is she loves her iphone but she loves the intense moments on the basketball court.
ReplyDeleteII. i liked how you described the basketball moment on perfect details, it tolled me more about the moment you had with Lexi on the basketball court. FOR EXAMPLE THIS ONE: Lexi then dribbled it down the court and made a layup. The crowd then went wild again. This was the best day ever! We were already winning
III. i liked the introduction it made me think and get a good example where your heading.
IV. indent your paragraphs and make it a little more neat please
I- The author is telling me she values her phone and basketball.
ReplyDeleteIII- One of the essays over all strengths is the description. It's very detailed and I can picture the things in my mind.
i think that it was great that you where writeing about basket ball and the priceless thing
ReplyDeleteYour items were good comparisons. Nice work.
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