Everything happens for a Reason
By: Haley Asselin
Authors notes:
1. I would like to get the reader to get out of my story, that making bad decisions can lead to life threatening issues. I also want them to realize if something bad like that happens you can overcome it and maybe even help people.
2. I think this short story was easy to write because it could be very realistic.
3. My weak area was probably putting a lot of detail & my conclusion.
4. Do i have enough details? Do i need more? What was good and not so good about my story? What should i work on?
Authors notes:
1. I would like to get the reader to get out of my story, that making bad decisions can lead to life threatening issues. I also want them to realize if something bad like that happens you can overcome it and maybe even help people.
2. I think this short story was easy to write because it could be very realistic.
3. My weak area was probably putting a lot of detail & my conclusion.
4. Do i have enough details? Do i need more? What was good and not so good about my story? What should i work on?
Bryan was an average senior in high school, he played hockey and baseball and just was a great kid overall. He had a sister named Brittany and parents that supported him no matter what he did. Bryan was always smiling and having fun with his friends and he even said it himself “I have a great life thanks to all the people in it”
It was about 8 o’clock and Bryan was planning to go out to this party at his friend Dans house. He heard there was going to be a lot of people there and Dan’s parents weren't going to be there all weekend so it seemed like a great idea to throw a party. Bryan had liked this girl named Taylor and she was going to be there and he really wanted to see if he had a chance with this girl, and this was a perfect time to finally talk to her.
Bryan got to the party at 10 and there was so many people at Dan’s house it was crazy. This was going to be a party that no one could forget. Right when Bryan got there he got asked if he wanted a drink, and he thought why not.. i’ll have one that won’t hurt. Bryan usually doesn’t drink, but it wasn’t a sport season so there was nothing in his mind that worried him like being kicked off the team. What Bryan didn’t know is that many things can happen when you drink and its not safe when you are a underaged drinker.
Bryan was having a great time, he got to talk to his love taylor and he was just having so much fun! Bryan wasn’t really paying attention to what his was drinking or how much he was drinking. All of his attention was on Taylor. Bryan and Taylor were talking about going back to Taylor's house to hang out because there was so many people it was hard to just have a conversation by themselves.
Taylor asked Bryan if she could drive his car for him because she didn’t drink and Bryan was obviously drunk. Bryan would not let Taylor drive. Taylor told him she wasn't going with him if he was driving. Bryan didn’t even respond he got into his car and started his car. "I see blood driping down on my lap. where am i? Am i alive? I see a bright light. Am i dead?"
Bryan had got hit by a truck because he was going the wrong way on the road. Taylor called 911 in complete shock, she thought it was all of her fault because she didn’t stop him. She tried but he just drove off. By the time it finally hit Taylor that he got hit by a car the ambulance was there and Bryan was not moving. Everyone that was at the party had gone home because they didn’t want to get caught for drinking.
By this time Bryan’s parents were there and crying and so was Taylor. Bryan was not responding to the paramedics and seemed to be unconscious. The paramedics got Bryan into the ambulance and were driving to the hospital while checking Bryan for any cuts or injuries. He seemed to be good except the big bruise on his neck.
The paramedics were not sure the damage the car accident had did on him, but they would know when they got to the hospital and did some tests. Bryan’s parents were still in shock and so was Taylor, but they were not going to leave him no matter what.
After the doctors had did some tests, the results were not good. Bryan was inacoma and the doctors were pretty sure that Bryan was not going to survive, he was not responding to the treatments the doctors had giving him. His parents were never going to give up on Bryan he is a fighter and he could make it through this!
After waiting a week of his parents waiting right by his side, Bryan woke up! Bryan tried to move his arm but he couldn't. Bryan was paralyzed and he couldn’t do anything about it.He was alive but he couldn’t even hold his mothers hand, she had to hold it for him. He began to cry but he knew he had to be strong. He could be dead right now but hes not so he has to make the best of it. He made the choice of driving drunk and now he has to deal with the consequences.
Bryan had pretty much done nothing for the next few weeks but watch movies and getting fed by his parents because he was incapable of doing anything for himself. Bryan felt very hopeless and useless because he had to rely on everyone but himself to do things.
Bryan had come up with this idea, he wanted to help teenagers with talking to them about what can happen when you get drunk underaged and how it’s not worth risking everything. He got a call from some high schools that wanted him to come in a talk about his story, he was excited but also really nervous.
After bryan was done speaking the crowd was so supportive of him and pretty much the whole crowd was crying. Bryan had told everyone how he lost everything, and he means everything, he lost all of things that he loved to do, he couldn’t do anymore and he has to rely on other people to do it for him.
Over the years Bryan was going to so many schools talking to teenagers about his story, every single person was so touched by him. He also kept getting emails from kids that he talked to, and they were all saying how he changed so many lives and now people would really think before they do something like that. Bryan never thought getting paralyzed could help change lives, but it really did.
Bryan continued to change lives with his parents and his new wife Taylor by his side. They never gave up on him and now hes changing lives. His parents and wife couldn’t be more proud.
1. The conflict in your story was that someone got into a car aciddent.
ReplyDelete2. The main character changes over time by changing other peoples lifes.
3. I honestly think my favorite part is when he starts to change peoples lifes, I think its awesome that he can change someones life.
4. I think the best quality of this tale is probably the part where everything bad happens because thats where bryan finally realizes that he needs to help change the world and make it a better place.
5. This storys theme was probably over all sad, but then in the end it gets happy because people are thankful for how bryan changes the world.
6. I think the only thing you need to do in order for this story to be absoultely perfect is to fix any spelling mistakes otherwise you did awesome!